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Writing 101

I didn’t make it past the lede on this AP story before my head started spinning:

After a century of nearly uninterrupted medical improvements and longer lives, it looks like the baby boomers could screw things up. A new government study shows deaths from heart disease, cancer and stroke continue to drop, but it also shows that half of Americans ages 55 to 64 _ including the oldest of the baby boomers _ have high blood pressure, and two in five are obese.
This means that this large group of aging Americans is in worse shape in some respects than those born a decade earlier were when they were the same age.

I summoned the courage to read further, but it didn’t get any better. That’s a real piece of work; one a Comp 101 teacher could use as a case study in how not to write.